Sunday, 3 August 2014

Pleading Eyes - 55 word fiction



This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 48; the forty-eighth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton

 

His sister sat in her wheelchair, her eyes hopeful that he would change his decision to leave. He was the only one who could make her laugh.
He kept mumbling to himself, regret nothing. That's what he believed in.
Still he glanced back, gave her a pleading look, hoping she understood. His free life waited.



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30 comments:

  1. :( I hope it was as tough for him as it was for her !! Nice FF.All the best for BAT :)

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  2. Touching. Really well written.
    Good Luck for BAT48!
    My Entry for BAT48

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    1. Thanks a lot. Good luck to you too...

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  3. Gagar mein sagar ... complete scene in 55 words!! Great :)

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    1. Thanks a lot! Great name for fast fiction - Gagar mein sagar :)

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  4. powerful words, Sister and brother stories always touch my heart

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    1. Same here. I am glad you liked this one :)

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    2. Same here. I am glad you liked this one :)

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  5. beautifully woven in just 55 words,followed your blog

    Letter Of Apology

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    1. Thanks for the appreciation and special thanks for the follow...

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  6. Very nicely written, Nima... Good job...:)

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  7. Siblings stories are always emotional....Good write...All the best.

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    1. Sibling stories do always make me smile. Thanks!

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  8. Very well written......But I felt he is running away from his duties who would look after her once he is gone........He is being selfish. Good Luck for BAT

    Here is my entry : Love, Apology, Death & Wedding

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    1. Thanks Pavil.
      He is being selfish, that's why he's feeling guilty and apologetic. But he's making the choice for himself...
      All the very best to you too. I really enjoyed your entry - very different, with an unexpected ending.

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  9. A bit mystery for me. Let me read again!

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  10. It would have been tough for him. Some choices are really hard. Wonderful work :)

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    1. Thanks Ash. One does have to make tough, selfish choices at times... all the time hoping that one wouldn't regret them in times to come.

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  11. nice 55er!! That apology will haunt him for the rest of his life won't it?

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    1. Thanks.
      The difficult choices do come back to haunt, don't they?

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  12. That should be tough for him. Good one! Keep writing for BAT!

    Someone is Special

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