Pleading Eyes - 55 word fiction
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His sister sat in her wheelchair, her eyes hopeful that he would change his decision to leave. He was the only one who could make her laugh.
He kept mumbling to himself, regret nothing. That's what he believed in.
Still he glanced back, gave her a pleading look, hoping she understood. His free life waited.
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:( I hope it was as tough for him as it was for her !! Nice FF.All the best for BAT :)
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DeleteTouching. Really well written.
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My Entry for BAT48
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DeleteGagar mein sagar ... complete scene in 55 words!! Great :)
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Deletepowerful words, Sister and brother stories always touch my heart
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DeleteSame here. I am glad you liked this one :)
Deletebeautifully woven in just 55 words,followed your blog
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DeleteVery nicely written, Nima... Good job...:)
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DeleteSiblings stories are always emotional....Good write...All the best.
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DeleteSibling stories do always make me smile. Thanks!
DeleteReally touching. Well written.
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DeleteVery well written......But I felt he is running away from his duties who would look after her once he is gone........He is being selfish. Good Luck for BAT
ReplyDeleteHere is my entry : Love, Apology, Death & Wedding
Thanks Pavil.
DeleteHe is being selfish, that's why he's feeling guilty and apologetic. But he's making the choice for himself...
All the very best to you too. I really enjoyed your entry - very different, with an unexpected ending.
A bit mystery for me. Let me read again!
ReplyDeleteIt would have been tough for him. Some choices are really hard. Wonderful work :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Ash. One does have to make tough, selfish choices at times... all the time hoping that one wouldn't regret them in times to come.
Deletenice 55er!! That apology will haunt him for the rest of his life won't it?
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DeleteThe difficult choices do come back to haunt, don't they?
That should be tough for him. Good one! Keep writing for BAT!
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DeleteThanks. BAT is always special...
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