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Pleading Eyes - 55 word fiction



This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 48; the forty-eighth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. 

 

His sister sat in her wheelchair, her eyes hopeful that he would change his decision to leave. He was the only one who could make her laugh.
He kept mumbling to himself, regret nothing. That's what he believed in.
Still he glanced back, gave her a pleading look, hoping she understood. His free life waited.
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  1. Sreeja Praveen4 August 2014 at 13:12

    :( I hope it was as tough for him as it was for her !! Nice FF.All the best for BAT :)

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  2. gkam4 August 2014 at 17:26

    Touching. Really well written.
    Good Luck for BAT48!
    My Entry for BAT48

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  3. Kokila Gupta5 August 2014 at 12:01

    Gagar mein sagar ... complete scene in 55 words!! Great :)

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    1. Nimi Arora5 August 2014 at 22:02

      Thanks a lot! Great name for fast fiction - Gagar mein sagar :)

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  4. Datta Ghosh5 August 2014 at 16:13

    powerful words, Sister and brother stories always touch my heart

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    1. Nimi Arora5 August 2014 at 22:02

      Same here. I am glad you liked this one :)

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    2. Nimi Arora29 June 2015 at 12:06

      Same here. I am glad you liked this one :)

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  5. cifar shayar5 August 2014 at 16:20

    beautifully woven in just 55 words,followed your blog

    Letter Of Apology

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    1. Nimi Arora5 August 2014 at 22:03

      Thanks for the appreciation and special thanks for the follow...

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  6. Priyashi5 August 2014 at 20:16

    Very nicely written, Nima... Good job...:)

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  7. Vidhya V Rao5 August 2014 at 20:53

    Siblings stories are always emotional....Good write...All the best.

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  8. Lancelot Quadras5 August 2014 at 20:59

    Really touching. Well written.

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  9. Pavil7 August 2014 at 13:38

    Very well written......But I felt he is running away from his duties who would look after her once he is gone........He is being selfish. Good Luck for BAT

    Here is my entry : Love, Apology, Death & Wedding

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    1. Nimi Arora8 August 2014 at 13:26

      Thanks Pavil.
      He is being selfish, that's why he's feeling guilty and apologetic. But he's making the choice for himself...
      All the very best to you too. I really enjoyed your entry - very different, with an unexpected ending.

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  10. aativas7 August 2014 at 19:57

    A bit mystery for me. Let me read again!

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  11. Ash Sharma8 August 2014 at 14:05

    It would have been tough for him. Some choices are really hard. Wonderful work :)

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    1. Nimi Arora8 August 2014 at 14:14

      Thanks Ash. One does have to make tough, selfish choices at times... all the time hoping that one wouldn't regret them in times to come.

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  12. the little princess8 August 2014 at 18:10

    nice 55er!! That apology will haunt him for the rest of his life won't it?

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    1. Nimi Arora10 August 2014 at 00:40

      Thanks.
      The difficult choices do come back to haunt, don't they?

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  13. Someone is Special9 August 2014 at 16:48

    That should be tough for him. Good one! Keep writing for BAT!

    Someone is Special

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