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Her Masterpiece... Flash Fiction

The photo prompt for this week's Friday Fictioneers

(copyright Douglas MacIlroy)


He entered the room in the evening. He looked around trying to look at things through her eyes.
There was an artwork using delicate sea shells and pebbles. It looked beautiful to him just as it was.
But alongside lay more stones and a bigger shell. What had she planned to do with it, he tried to imagine.
She always jokingly referred to this artwork as her ‘masterpiece’. He knew she actually meant it.
The room was the way she had left it that night almost two years ago. She had wanted to work a little longer. He had insisted otherwise.

She never woke up the next morning.



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  1. Björn Rudberg17 October 2014 at 01:33

    Unfinished masterpiece... such sadness.. but maybe it's better in some ways.. the memories will be so much stronger by the questions.

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:35

      It is better to have loved and lost than never to have loved at all...

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  2. a Rat17 October 2014 at 12:31

    sad.. well written..

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  3. Datta Ghosh17 October 2014 at 12:48

    I read it twice and yes there was a sudden sadness that gripped me.....sorrow has its own beauty I guess

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:37

      Sorrow is a part of life... tragedy is when it takes over one's life...

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  4. Amrit Sinha17 October 2014 at 13:27

    Poignant .... but such is the unpredictability of life.

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:38

      Thanks Amrit...
      'Kya Jaana Kab Marenge' - the unpredictability of life!

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  5. Rochelle Wisoff-Fields17 October 2014 at 16:00

    Dear Nimi,

    There are always those 'what if's'. Nicely done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:38

      Thanks Rochelle. Pleasure that you visited my blog :)

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  6. uncertaintales17 October 2014 at 16:58

    Sad finish on this one, well done.

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  7. Indrani17 October 2014 at 20:13

    Oh! Didn't expect the sad end.
    Great writing!

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:39

      Thanks Indrani. Great to see your comment on my blog... Thanks again :)

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  8. Sandra Crook18 October 2014 at 20:00

    Very sad.

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:39

      Life is...
      Thanks for reading and commenting, Sandra...

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  9. Jyotsna Bhatia18 October 2014 at 22:24

    Didnt expect the ending. Well written !

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  10. Davinder Kaur19 October 2014 at 22:57

    I like your take on this picture.

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:40

      Thanks Davinder...
      Special thanks for your support!

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  11. yarnspinnerr20 October 2014 at 20:50

    An unexpected twist. Very well crafted.

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:40

      Thanks a lot. I am happy you like the way the story is spun :)

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  12. P.S. Joshi21 October 2014 at 17:52

    Nimi, Good and realistic story. At least he has something to remember her by. Well written. :) --- Susan

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    1. Nimi Arora28 October 2014 at 08:42

      Thanks, Susan.
      Yes, it is good that he has something to remember her by. But his guilt has made a source of sorrow...

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